I agree with the previous posters-- this is really good! Story is intriguing and creepy, twist was great. Art is nice, and I like the break from the usual 'sprite in the center of the screen' style.
Some humble suggestions: It could do with one more proofread; I noticed some capitalization/punctuation issues, as well as a few words that needed a space between. And it kinda broke immersion to say things like 'Grant now trusts you more'. Maybe a little icon or sound effect would be less intrusive? Or even better, can you convey the trust in the characters' dialogue or by their actions instead? (eg. Grant grins at you in the rearview mirror.) Anyway, really hope to see the finished game!
So idk what happened at the end did Math and the other two turn into skinwalkers or something? Is that why they were acting kinda off? Or were they hiding stuff from Colt the whole time? Highkey interested lmao.
Really liked the start of the visual novel, it gives me vibes of ‘Supernatural’ from a regular hunter’s perspective, but the monsters are actually the threat that they would be. I’m really interested in what is going on with the other world, that moonscape across the desert looks amazing, and really could be open to so many different meanings at this point. While you have a great cast of starting characters, we really have a medley of personalities in order to see this world through. It was worth playing the game through multiple times so I could have every conversation with each of the group.
Looking forward to where you take the story in future updates.
Bro I love supernatural 🤤 I wanted to draw inspiration without plagiarism (I hope I accomplished that) Thank you for making a video on it! I watched it and considered everything you said.
There are a lot of parts in the story that could follow common sense (especially considering that Colton is a kid). I plan to re-write this part in the full version. I appreciate the feedback✨ Thanks!
What a great twist at the end there! I really liked everything about this, especially the art in the forest scenes. It really added to the whole vibe of the game. You have something good here, keep it comin !
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I agree with the previous posters-- this is really good! Story is intriguing and creepy, twist was great. Art is nice, and I like the break from the usual 'sprite in the center of the screen' style.
Some humble suggestions: It could do with one more proofread; I noticed some capitalization/punctuation issues, as well as a few words that needed a space between. And it kinda broke immersion to say things like 'Grant now trusts you more'. Maybe a little icon or sound effect would be less intrusive? Or even better, can you convey the trust in the characters' dialogue or by their actions instead? (eg. Grant grins at you in the rearview mirror.)
Anyway, really hope to see the finished game!
This demo blew me away! The art is great, I really enjoyed the writing and the narrative was easy to follow while also being interesting.
Can't wait to see it become a full game!
So idk what happened at the end did Math and the other two turn into skinwalkers or something? Is that why they were acting kinda off? Or were they hiding stuff from Colt the whole time? Highkey interested lmao.
Looking forward to where you take the story in future updates.
Bro I love supernatural 🤤 I wanted to draw inspiration without plagiarism (I hope I accomplished that) Thank you for making a video on it! I watched it and considered everything you said.
There are a lot of parts in the story that could follow common sense (especially considering that Colton is a kid). I plan to re-write this part in the full version. I appreciate the feedback✨ Thanks!
The atmosphere combined with the art style makes this visual novel impossible not to finish. I love it overall. 10/10
THANK YOU FOR MAKING A VIDEO ON IT✨ Feedback is highly appreciated, enjoyed watching
You're welcome, I'm happy you enjoyed the video.
What a great twist at the end there! I really liked everything about this, especially the art in the forest scenes. It really added to the whole vibe of the game. You have something good here, keep it comin !
THANKS! Your comment means a lot to me, glad you enjoyed the demo
Nice looking art style. I also enjoy the story. Good enough as a standalone. Will play if a full game release.
Yo! Glad to hear✨I'm currently planning out the full game :D